Not sure if I should have made another blog post, but what the heck.
Anyway, it might have been a mistake for me to post my second chapter so early, before proof reading it, seems that my story's rating has gone down, which is a bit of a disappointment.
Well, can't say it's greater than I had hoped but it's certainly better than I had feared, fortunately most people seem to be enjoying my story so far.
Thanks for all the great comments I've gotten so far, I'll certainly keep them in mind.
Anyway my update was basically to reduce my grammatical errors and missing/redundant words. Hopefully I've also clarified who is speaking at which time as well.