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Denae's descent

November 16, 2012
Posted at 7:40 am

Hi all,

I wish to thank all the fine folks who have taken the time to write to me to express their dissatisfaction with the turn Always on Guard took in the last two chapters.

It took me a while but I finally pulled the files I'd posted. Chapters 31 and 32 were exactly as I remembered them. I was a bit puzzled at some of the e-mails I received.

So I went back through the other chapters I'd posted and my confusion eased immediately.

Sometime between finishing the story in 2009 and posting it in 2012, I revised several earlier chapters to recast Denae into what I consider a typical teenage girl. I distinctly remember rewriting large sections of first-person accounts to reflect her grown sense of invincibility, not only because she had a powerful man at her side but because she was immensely popular with the citizens.

The only problem is that I didn't bother to revised the text I sent out to my proofreader. I sent him the original files I received from BlackIrish (who I'm positive pointed out to me that Denae needed to be reworked at the front). ZoltanTheDuck does excellent work -- as the improvement of my stories since he signed on can attest. I rarely -- if ever -- check his work when it's returned. Oh, I might give the chapter a quick read but I don't pore over every comma and semicolon.

BlackIrish is a terrific editor -- and not only because he can parse through my ramblings to get from what I said to what I meant. He does a thorough job of pointing out inconsistencies in the characters and in the plot. He's saved me from myself a dozen times in each story he's looked over.

Then it comes to the author. He sometimes doesn't live up to his end of the bargain -- such as when he fails to notice for months on end that he's posted obsolete files. I am digging through my story files in an attempt to locate the versions that reflect the changes I made after it was edited but before it was proofed.

As soon as I locate them and clean up the copy, I'll post the revised chapters and let the readers know. I think it will make the story more enjoyable for the folks who have followed along since the outset.

Meanwhile, I hope you'll continue to follow along as Part 2 opens today.

Best wishes,
Jay C.