hello again just thought I'd clear up a few things that some people are still having problems with, but the good news there is not as many as last time.
1. for the people that have problems with selling and grammar there are a few differences between Australian and US English and im Australian, and i don't really care about scores. i just simply want to tell the story thats in my head and i thought i would share it with the world.
and sirgeek is currently re-editing the first 3 chapters so be patient.
and i change perspective when i think its needed when you see this ______________________________ it means the perspective and or location has changed.
chapter 5 is still in progress but it is a bit stop/start at the moment.