OK guys and girls thank you for all your feed back and being brutally honest with me about my mistakes the kind of mistakes my editor should have seen and fix.
so as of now im looking for a more experienced editor one that will make it so i can concentrate on my plots and not worry to much about the spelling and grammar.
my second chapter is done and will be the test for anyone interested.
oh and to answer the questions of some about realism
he was under the influence of the probe when he reached out and touched it
and the prob is teaching him about his abilities in his dreams, that is why he can leave the hospital yet